Sunday, June 20, 2010
shrek
One day I was walking down the street and saw that I had ended up at a gate that I have never seen before it said do not take the risk! and had a picture on it it looked like a o gar. I turned around and went back home after we had dinner at 8.00 and when it was 9.30 i went to bed then when I closed my door behind me I quickly got my torch, my shot gun, some water, some food, and a liter. then i put it under my bed and waited for my mum and dad went to bed I waited till they went to bed at 12.35 in the morning so i climbed out of bed and quietly jumped out of my window and then I landed on some think. When I jumped up I said i do watch out I do Karate then he said wait I your friend David OK i said well what are you doing here I said same as you he said ok then lets go I said when we got there I told him to get his grass cutter and cut the chain then it took 35 minuets to cut the chain then we slowly crawled inside and then i turned on the torch and looked every where then i sudently i saw a ripped gate i slowly walked to it i told David to come here we looked for any o gars their weren't any then we heard the gate close aaaahhh i heard that was David where are you i said. he didn't answer i ran to the gate some think grabbed me by the back aaaahhhhhhh he said hello i said who are you?i asked he said Shrek then i fainted and when i woke up i was at my house in bed then i thought it was all a dream.
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What i did well: What I did well was I didn't spell any think wrong.
ReplyDeleteWhat I learnt: I learnt that next time i should make it much better not just plane.
What could I do better next time: I could makeit inter-resting for people to read.
kool story Adam
ReplyDeleteCool story but you could use some more exciting words like tremendous and plummeting but other then that it was a fantastic story
ReplyDeleteI like the way you have used your imagination. However,I can tell that you did not read this story out loud to yourself. It does not make sense in places and would of been even more exciting if you had used some interesting vocabulary.
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